User:ShanelleSmith/Parable of the Sower (novel)/Bfoley51 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

ShanelleSmith


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:ShanelleSmith/Parable_of_the_Sower_(novel)?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Parable of the Sower (novel)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The lead in the sandbox article expands significantly on the lead of the current article, providing more context both for the story itself, as well as its place among the author's other works. The lead is concise, and contains a good amount of context for the rest of the article, without becoming long-winded. The addition of subheadings for a "characters" section and a "themes" help expand the scope of the current article, and will likely continue to grow as the article continues to develop. The plot synopsis of the sandbox article contains some relevant information not yet included in the current article, however, the plot synopsis of the current article feels very concise already, so additions made to it should be specific and carefully selected.

Ultimately, the sandbox article does an excellent job of broadening the scope of the current article. The proposed additions to the lead make for a well rounded introduction, and specific additions to the plot summary can help flesh out the article as well. I would focus on the additions of the characters and themes sections, as these are likely were the article will continue to grow.