User:ShanelleSmith/Parable of the Sower (novel)/SammyGatenby Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Shanelle Smith


 * Link to draft you're reviewing User:ShanelleSmith/Parable of the Sower (novel)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Parable of the Sower (novel)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead Section - The lead section has been adequately updated with much more information than before. It has no citations, which I think it must need - especially on the sentence about the potential commentary of the novel. It does not have brief description of upcoming sections

Content - All of it is relevant to the topic. There is much needed detail on the plot and characters of the novel. I think there could be a new section made for minor characters, and making the names more identifiable as they get muddled in their descriptions

Tone/Balance - All good

Sources - All good

Organisation - not the easiest to read at times. Could be more concise and clear

Images - None

Overall - the added detail of the plot, themes and characters are extremely helpful and strong. The theme section is slightly weaker. At the beginning religion is mentioned, which could be used in this section, or a motif section perhaps. The father figure again may fall into a motif rather than theme necessarily.