User:Sharleen Lawrence/Rare-earth mineral/JesseChadder Peer Review

General info
Sharleen Lawrence
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Sharleen%20Lawrence/Rare-earth_mineral?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Rare-earth mineral

Evaluate the drafted changes
Clarity

- Article is clear about the topic it is covering.

- Lead paragraph is concise and does a good job at summarizing the content of the topic.

Structure

- The article is clearly separated based on topic.

- I think the order of the sections also makes sense.

- There is a citation listed after every sentence which makes where the information came from for each claim very clear.

Balanced Coverage and Neutrality

- The article seems to have been written without any bias or agenda.

The article doesn't try to persuade or influence the reader in any particular direction

- Words that would indicate a personal opinion are avoided like I or me.

- No claims are made without a proper citation

- Citations are clearly listed in a reference list at the bottom of the article

Sources

- All links are working and direct the reader to the original source

- Most of the references come from appropriate origins, like peer reviewed journals or museums

- All sources are relevant to the topic

- All sources are recent, within the past 10 years.

'''Improvement suggestions '''- Some sentences could be combined with each other to help improve the flow of the article. For example, the third and fourth sentences of the Lead paragraph.

- There are some areas where the grammar makes it hard to understand what you are trying to explain. For example, in the sentence "If the element fits within the category of the rare-earth-elements it would be a bias towards a rare earth minerals." I'm not sure exactly you are trying to say here. Maybe rewriting the sentence could improve its clarity.

- There are some areas where filler words are included that complicate the sentence. For example, "Many of our rare-earth minerals include rare-earth elements which thus hold the same significant purpose of rare-earth minerals", the word thus and significant can be removed without the original meaning of the sentence changing.

- Citation #8 should be replaced with a non-Wikipedia source.

- Maybe finding a scientific article where it defines what a rare-earth metal is would be better than using a definition from a website like Britannica.