User:SharmaPrachi12/COVID-19 lockdown in India/Olivia2701 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

SharmaPrachi12


 * Link to draft you're reviewing


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?

The content is relevant to the topic.


 * Is the content added up-to-date?

The content is up to date as it includes information about India's lockdown from December 2020 until April 2021.


 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

Unlocks 1-6 which cover India's lockdown from June 2020 to November 2020 are not mentioned in this draft. SharmaPrachi12 can expand upon these unlocks and improve the content within these sections for the final draft. Touching on the emotional and social impacts of the COVID-19 pandemic in India would also be important in the final draft.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?

The content is neutral as it is reporting on the procedures that were taken in each of the steps of India's unlocks.


 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?

No, it is neutral.


 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?

An underrepresented viewpoint is the social and emotional impacts that have resulted from the COVID-19 pandemic. Including research about what social and emotional impacts have arisen in India's population would be a point that could be further expanded upon.


 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

This article is neutral with no bias towards one viewpoint over another.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?

There are reliable newspaper articles sourced in the reference list.


 * Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.)

Yes, the content accurately reflects the cited sources.


 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?

There is not much research on this topic yet since it is new, but the draft reflects the literature that is currently available.


 * Are the sources current?

The sources are current as they are either from 2020 or 2021.


 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?

There are a wide variety of different articles that are sourced. Historically marginalized voices from all parts of Indian society and different genders are evident in the draft through the presentation of the sourced articles.


 * Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.)

Some scholarly sources are available about the impacts of the COVID-19 pandemic, but not specifically about India's approach to managing the crisis. Some of these scholarly sources about the COVID-19 pandemic could be used as a starting point for research. Then news coverage could be used to include specific information about India's COVID-19 pandemic situation from 2020-2021.


 * Check a few links. Do they work?

These links are functional.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?

The content added is concise and clear. However, it is not the easiest to read. Parts of the article do not flow well; one point seems disjointed from another. Using more transition words and explaining how sentences relate to one another would make this draft more succinct.


 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?

There are some grammatical errors in this draft. Notably, there should be more commas used throughout this draft to help with its readability, as there are a few run on sentences. Also, the word social should not usually be capitalized unless it is at the start of the sentence. If it should be capitalized, it would be helpful to explain why since the word appears multiple times in this draft.


 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

It is well organized into sections in chronological order.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?

The content added to unlocks 7-11 provides updated information to the out of date research in the original article.


 * What are the strengths of the content added?

The content added addresses key issues during unlocks 7-11 that were not included in the original article.


 * How can the content added be improved?

More content could be added about the social and emotional impacts people in India have experienced as a result of each of the unlocks. Further, the overall grammar and readability of the article draft could be improved upon.