User:Shaum17/Anthony Elanga/Bb836drexel Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Shaum17


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Shaum17/Anthony_Elanga?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Anthony Elanga

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The Lead contains unnecessary, awkward information that might go better in other sections such as the fact that Elanga is right-footed. This information is perhaps better suited to the Article Body. The Article Body contains relevant, important information about Elanga's background. However, one minor error is there are two periods following one of the sentences in the Body section. The tone overall is neutral and presents the information in a clear, succinct way. However, the syntax and wording at times is a little awkward and can be made clear; for example, "he is not married and is single" can be reworded. The sources used are reliable and are accurately cited for the information they contain. Overall, these edits add valuable background information on Elanga that strengthens the article.