User:Shawnhua8888/Maintenance and Welfare of Parents and Senior Citizens Act, 2007/Dinakmehta Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (provide username) Shawnhua8888
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Shawnhua8888/Maintenance and Welfare of Parents and Senior Citizens Act, 2007

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Lead evaluation
I think I am a little confused, only because I am not sure where your work is fitting into the main article. You changed your topic right - it is not about the Senior Citizens act anymore? Maybe this is a Wikipedia issue, that I am being linked to some different Wikipedia article?

This confusion aside, I really like your specific focus on the Dalit faction of the neo-Buddhism and Buddhist traditions. Does the article you are adding to define or explain about the Dalit Buddhist population? If not, this might be a good introductory sentence to include in your lead as context before jumping into the critiques and theorists of the tradition and Dalit Buddhist movements.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

Content evaluation
I think your content is really good, specifically in that you have a really good flow of ideas. I like that you have different paragraphs each highlighting a different perspective on the Dalit community within the Buddhist tradition. Similar to my note above, I think some more context on the Navanyana movement (if it is not already in the article) would be really helpful!

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Tone and balance evaluation
I think you do a good job of achieving balance here, given that you note multiple different perspectives on the topic. One thing I noticed is that all of these are critiques of the movement - is this intentional not to highlight any "pro" Dalit Buddhist movement perspectives? I am not sure if you are specifically writing a section on "critiques of the movement", but if not might be nice to offset with some scholars who are for the movement and its progress.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Are the sources current?
 * Check a few links. Do they work?

Sources and references evaluation
I see your sources that are the theorists name in parenthesis and they all look good! Maybe you can put them as an official source by clicking the "cite" button and then copying and pasting the link into the search bar that pops up. This way a citation in a footnote style will automatically be formulated for you!

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Organization evaluation
I think your organization is clear and well structured, a different paragraph for each critique makes things very clear. When you transfer over the work into the main page it might be cool to add headings and subheadings to sections too if you feel it is applicable!

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

Images and media evaluation
Not yet, but excited to see them in the future!

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

New Article Evaluation
N/A

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * How can the content added be improved?

Overall evaluation
I think the addition is really powerful in that it draws attention to this specific movement and subsection of the Buddhist community that I am guessing does not get discussed or written about as often. I think with some a little bit more context surrounding the movement (which you might not even need depending on what is included in the article you are adding to) everything will be very clear and it will be a very strong addition!