User:Sheepies/Will and Testament (Novel)/Helengracedaniel Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sheepies, AidanAjw, Ssr13


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 * User:Sheepies/Will and Testament (Novel)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Lead Section
The lead section is very concise, and I think it fits the article well. Every fact brought up in the lead is elaborated on later. The only thing I might add is a sentence previewing the reception, awards, and adaptations, since those sections are pretty important to the novel/article. It could even be one sentence together covering all of those topics. If you feel like it might be getting long after adding that information, you could combine the sentences about publication, since that information is also presented in the infobox.

Content
I think the things you chose to include are relevant and interesting. I wondered if maybe the dreams you talk about in the Themes section could be expounded in the Structure section?

I don't think anything is unnecessarily added or blatantly missing.

Tone and Balance
I think you all did a good job of remaining neutral in your writing. You also provided good balance between each opinion in your reception section.

Sources and References
I would say your sources are very thorough, and your information is solidly backed by these references. I saw a lot of the information and themes you wrote about in the article present in your sources.

The links are also all working.

Organization

 * Under the plot summary section, should “marriages” be singular? Same section, “devorce” should be “divorce.”


 * In the Lead section, the Reception and Controversy section, and the Adaptation section, add a comma after “In 2019”
 * Might just be me, but could there be another word instead of "chagrined" in the character's section? I could figure out what the definition might be from context, but I didn't know for sure until I looked up the definition. It might be easier on the reader if there was a more common adjective used here.

I like the way you laid out your sections as well.

I think the section titled "Reception and Controversy" could just be shortened to "Reception." The controversy is a subset of the general reception I would think.

Images and Media
There are no images. Maybe include a photo of the author? I also wonder if there is a photo available of the “creative staging elements” you reference in the Adaptations section that could be inserted there.

Notability
16 sources! Wow, that's amazing. I recognized most of the sources as well, so it seems very notable.

Infobox looks great. If you wanted to be more specific (and if the information was available), you could put the month and day of the publications.

I think you could maybe add a link to the Wikipedia page Will and testament, maybe the first place in the plot summary you mention the father's will?

Overall Impressions
You all did a wonderful job! Every thing is well-organized and easy to read for the most part. Great work. I hope this review is helpful!!