User:Shelbyyyw/California aqueduct/Handro19 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Wilbur, Shelby


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Shelbyyyw/California aqueduct


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * User:Shelbyyyw/California aqueduct

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

I think you are missing a lead for the contribution you are writing.

I do think you section is very relevant, and it could use a bit more information.

There is a lot to mention about Land Subsidence

I do think it is an overall good first major draft.!

Your tone is informative and overall neutral up until the consequences section. I think it making the langue more neutral rather than negative change that.

It is easy to read and I think there is one or two grammatical errors.

Once done this should be a good addition to the overall article

I think your sources are credible and relative to the topic you are adding.

Overall good job!

Thank you for the feedback!

It is definitely a work in progress and I have a lot of work to do on it and information to add.

I will go back and revise the lead once I have my section to add into the article. Since it is not a new article, I wasn't going tot touch the lead until my information was clear to add into the existing lead.

-Shelby