User:Shelly Nazareth/Griselda Pollock/Eliza321 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Shelly Nazareth


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Shelly Nazareth/Griselda Pollock
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Griselda Pollock

Evaluate the drafted changes
First of all, I think you picked a really great topic to improve on Wikipedia. Griselda Pollock sounds very interesting, and I am excited to learn more about her!

I think that the sections have all been laid out in a way that makes sense and flow naturally throughout the content of the article, and I also think that it overall is giving the reader a relevant, balanced and neutral understanding of the topic. (Which is great, and pretty difficult to do!)

I think it can prove even more challenging to add to an existing article rather than just starting from scratch, so kudos to you! There were quite a few statements that were unsourced, but I don't really see that as being a problem for you, because I am assuming you can draw from a lot of source material on the existing page for citations when you add in the new stuff. (Just something to be careful of though, in case the existing page was also struggling with some unsourced statements.) There were also just a few grammatical issues (one of them in the 'personal life' section), but again I think you'll be able to catch any grammar issues as you continue working on it. :)

Overall, it is all looking good, so good luck with it! I would be interested to learn about any 'reverberating' effects from her work... like has she inspired any specific people, other art historians or artists, do professors teach about her work in school... that sort of thing. I think hearing about the broader world impact of her work would be cool- she obviously has contributed a lot to this field, and I think there could be some interesting stuff out there, that could get into some more specifics. This might be getting into some grey less neutral territory, but maybe adding a section about why her work is so important, maybe a little background on how the art world had historically been very male dominated or something. (I don't know if this is a good idea or not, it may be totally irrelevant.) Just a little food for thought!