User:Shemcgee/Scream queen/2020tabracey Peer Review

General info
(provide username) Shemcgee
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * - She didn't have a sandbox draft or bibliography
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Doesn't exist but her article is :

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

since you have no article for me to review ii'm going to help give like points and things from the article i read for when you write yours.

When you write yours:


 * I think adding picture to this article will really help the article visually.


 * I would try making the article more simple and easy to understand. Some parts are a bit hard to follow for me.
 * When you're writing your own stuff, remember to be clear and stick to the main idea also. Oh, and don't forget to add where you found your information from. That's super important!

What to change about the article :


 * Try breaking down your article into smaller sections, like "Different Animals in the Ocean" or "Why the Ocean is Important." Think it will help readers follow along, for me it was a lot.
 * I noticed it talked about dolphins living in freshwater lakes, but I think they mostly live in saltwater oceans.
 * In some parts, like when it talked about the different layers of the ocean, it got a bit confusing. Maybe you could explain each layer more clearly.

What makes a good Article:


 * Your lead section is clear and easy to understand.
 * Good overview of what the article is about.
 * Structuring the article with different sections. It makes it easier to find information.
 * Good job of covering different aspects of the topic.
 * Fair: The writing doesn't seem to take sides or show strong opinions.
 * Includes reliable sources to back up your information.

~ 2020tabracey