User:Sherrysyc/Westlake exposition/Yiwen122 Peer Review

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Hi, Sherry this is a great start, few suggestions to your articles:

First of all you could add photos of Westlake exposition, photos need to be first hand, or pictures already exist on Wikipedia. Secondly, expand more on the leading section: summary of overall article, add more historical background etc. Thirdly, you could explore more sub-sections, like what kind of program included in the expo, historical background, and the 1476000 items you mentioned on leading section you could talk more about it, like what kind of item included, anything luxury, important? You could use Universal Exposition, Shanghai Expo as your references and The Westlake international expo website: ' http://www.xh-expo.com/index.html' you could also look at it. Your references are reliable, but you do not have bibliography on your site. Another thing is that you should add reference on the second part of your leading, make sure you add link of citation after each paragraph. Overall, great job and good start, I think you are on the right track, just keep editing, and expand more information.