User:Shislegm/sandbox

Article evaluation of "Climate Change in the United States":

- Some adverbs and adjectives used are wishy washy and unclear

-Ex. "relatively"

- Some of the information could be updated to a more recent year, if available - Colorado and Florida's "Climate change by states" are very minimal and lacking compared to the other states included

-Why are only a handful of states represented and mentioned? Is it possible to include all 50 states or is there not enough information on some states, as individuals, to do so?

As far as the similarities between my comments and the comments on the talk page, there was one similarity, and that is regarding the lack of information on climate change in Colorado and Florida. One of the big topics of discussion was whether this page should be merged with the "Climate change policy of the United States" page on Wiki, which I disagree with because this page does not solely focus on the politics and policies of global warming, but also the facts regarding it in the United States, which is different from policies.

FINAL ARTICLE:

Effects of global warming on human health

The article that I have decided to work on is "Effects of global warming on human health". There are currently four wikiprojects monitoring this page, but none of them have a to-do list, they all just say "improve the coverage of [name of wikiproject]." However, reading through the article, I noticed a couple things that I want to change. The biggest thing I want to edit are the grammatical errors because there are a lot. It is mainly just saying "and" when meaning to say "an" and not hyphenating words that need to be hyphenated. But there are also two sections that I think need serious revision. The first being a section on HIV/AIDs, which I think the idea is a big stretch, especially given that there are only two sources referenced in this section. It talks about how the increased floods and droughts will lead to a food shortage which will directly affect immunocompromised HIV patients because they will die from not having food, even though anyone who does not have enough food will die. It also says that because of these food shortages, people will sell their bodies to pay for food, which I do not think is directly related to climate change. Also, there is quoted material in the section, which is not allowed, even if it is referenced. Overall, I find that section kind of pointless and think it should be deleted. There is also a permafrost section that is very heavily discussed on the Talk page because people think it should be moved to the "Effects of global warming on permafrost" article, as it does not do a good job discussing how the permafrost directly relates to its effects on humans. As far as activity on the talk page, it is kind of minimal for such a controversial topic. Looking at the history, I noticed that the last edit was made in March of 2018 which surprised me because of how hot this topic is at the moment, and also given the recent article that was published last week that states that we only have until 2030 to reduce carbon emissions drastically or else climate change will be catastrophic. I will continue to monitor the page as I work on it to see if any new edits or additions are made.

Link about mental hospitalizations due to increased temps in Hong Kong

Link about planetary health

Link about infectious diseases

Link about permafrost