User:Shivamp1999/Machiavellianism (psychology)/Samarahzeinou Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Shivamp1999/Machiavellianism (psychology)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Shivamp1999/Machiavellianism_%28psychology%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Machiavellianism (psychology)

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think you have done a great job gathering information, however I believe that you could work on the information you have decided to use in a few sections. I would also work on using a more neutral tone when relaying the information. I did find it a little bit difficult to understand what you were saying about the dark triad traits in relation to studies and video games. The details you provided about these traits and entrepreneurship were much easier for me to follow along with. I think that by adding a little bit more data/instruction between subjects would help the flow of the article while presenting all of this new and useful knowledge. I honestly believe that part of this has to do with the amount of substance that you are able to write about based on the topic at hand, and I'm sure that with a few more edits you will have this article where it needs to be in no time.