User:Shreya.C123/History of tea in India/AB.cal Peer Review

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Shreya.C123
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Shreya.C123/History of tea in India
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 * History of tea in India

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall I think your additions are very powerful and add a much needed angle to the history of tea in India. However, I think they often slide into a non-neutral tone in describing the actions of the British in India, as in these sentences (especially since they are uncited):

"Tea was widely grown as a cash crop and a monocrop, as a means for the British to expand their empire, exploit the land, and loot profit out of native hands."

"The British used any means necessary to prioritize profit and capital at the cost of native lives."

I would also suggest eliminating the use of direct quotes in your citations, as recommended in the trainings.

The section on commercialization, while very informative, is biased in its argument (by Wikipedia standards) since it only presents one angle of commercialization. I see a lot of themes from GPP 115 as well; while we may agree that the IMF and World Bank are neoliberal institutions or that the Green Revolution had many negative outcomes, these are not widely accepted facts and are probably not suitable for this particular page of Wikipedia. Overall while I think this last section is very informative, it may be too argumentative for Wikipedia, at least in its current form.