User:Sidney Gordon/Chinatown, Vancouver/Viola Q Lin Peer Review

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(provide username) Sidney Gordon


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 * User:Sidney Gordon/Chinatown, Vancouver


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 * Chinatown, Vancouver

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The lead of each paragraph is pretty concise. It is great to have a lot of authoritative data added to the paragraphs, and the text also fits the theme very well. Maybe try adding some recent population data in Chinatown for comparison. I find that the content is mostly about negative effects, maybe try to be more neutral and add some positive events. The sources cited are authoritative, and cited often, which is excellent. But I will be excited to see biography to be enrich in having more physical sources instead of made up of online/library sources mostly. Thanks for the feedback Viola! Adding in some more recent data is a great idea. Unfortunately for this this topic, the info for this location can only be found reliably though the book Red Light Neon that is sited for most of my edits. The rest is mostly hidden or written on blog post, which is why I think it is so important to bring it to a more visible platform. None of the sources are made up and I know it is unfortunate that the text is not available to read online. I have learned a lot through reading the physical copy of the book. I will definitely be looking to enrich the biography more with supporting sources though. I will also consider adding onto the leads and article intro.Sidney Gordon (talk) 07:05, 29 March 2021 (UTC)