User:Siena1018/Discrimination against people with HIV/AIDS/Mesmith017 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Siena1018


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Siena1018/Discrimination_against_people_with_HIV/AIDS


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Discrimination_against_people_with_HIV/AIDS

Evaluate the drafted changes
Content

The proposed additions are very informative. It's evident that this group completed thorough research. The content is relevant to the topic and to current events with the addition of information about Covid-19 and HIV. This group did a very good job of linking in other relevant pages into this article. I think you all picked important sections to expand upon or create.

Tone and Balance

This was a very objective article. Many sources were synthesized to create an informative page on the topic. There were no unsupported or biased opinions in these sections. Both of the sections about HIV in marginalized groups and the section about blood bans did a particularly good job of presenting information in a very factual way from many sources.

Sources and References

The many sources that were used all appear to be reputable and add important information relevant to the topic.

Organization

The structure of the article in the sandbox for the most part makes sense to me and appears to fit well into the existing format of the article. I think the first HIV-related stigma section could be improved by having an introductory sentence with some context regarding the history of stigmas surrounding HIV or a definition/link regarding stigma in general. Secondly, I imagine that the two marginalized group sections are currently separated since they were worked on by two different people. It's likely this was already your plan but it will make sense to combine those paragraphs under the same heading in the final article.

Overall impression

I thought this group did a really great job for the draft. The paragraphs and subsections are a good length for a wikipedia page and the subsections follow a logical order. Each section takes from a variety of reputable articles allowing the reader to learn a lot about the different factors that play a role in HIV discrimination.