User:Sillyant777/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Immersion (virtual reality)

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
The topic of immersion, or virtual reality, is so important to modern technology today and I thought it was a really interesting idea. It is on the lesser importance scale, but I do not see how. There are improvements to be made, like the differentiation between virtual reality with video games, books, and more. I think the definition of immersion is very broad so tackling this differentiation could be interesting to do.

Evaluate the article
The first sentence you see on the article page is very concise and to the point of what immersion/virtual reality consists of. This gives the reader a nice and easy jumping pad to go off from later into the article. The contents list all of the major topics discussed in the article correctly, and there appears to be no bias for the concept of VR. Although there are pictures for almost every major passage, they are not too visually pleasing. As well as this, it looks like two main paragraphs can be cleaned up due to them being merged from "immersive technology," another article that relates to immersion (virtual reality). The overall status is of low importance and the starter level of editing. It is in heavy relation to the computer science pages on Wikipedia. I think the article is well developed but it could be better, like more clarification on the term immersion and visual improvements like the images. It may be a bit lengthy and could flow better like when speaking about the scientists who were involved in the major core components of VR. The talk page of this also thinks there needs to be more clarification on the usage of the term "immersion."