User:Silmarlu/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Industrial arts

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I chose this article to evaluate because I have dabbled with woodworking and metalworking in my spare time and have always wished my middle and high schools offered such classes.

Evaluate the article
The Lead Section starts off with a good description defining Industrial Arts. It also includes brief descriptions about the major sections in the article, albeit in too much detail. However, there is a large imbalance in the content of these sections, with one clearly dominating over the others. This section describes in great detail the Industrial Arts curriculum in New South Wales while very little mention is given to the United States, which was also mentioned in the Lead Section, in addition to neglecting the many other countries in the world. There is also no mention of women or minority groups in the article.

This resulted in a heavy overrepresentation and bias towards Industrial Arts in New South Wales. The wording, too, emphasizes this bias. For example, the phrases "This builds greater significance and understanding in students" and "The IIATE has run some very successful training days" all introduce an overly positive tone to Industrial Arts in New South Wales.

The issue that stands out most in this article is the lack of references and citations. The single reference listed describes the history of Industrial Arts at SUNYCO, yet most of the article discusses Industrial Arts in New South Wales. These facts must be cited and supported by diverse sources.

The organization and writing quality, besides the issues mentioned above, are both good and easy to read. However, the addition of a few images, perhaps of the inside of an Industrial Arts classroom or of examples of what students would make in one, could help enhance the article. The talk section also shows concern towards the lack of discussion of Industrial Arts outside of New South Wales and the lack of sources, which should be addressed.

Overall this article is easy to read but contains clear bias and overrepresentation and lacks diverse sources. The article could be improved by editing down the portions about New South Wales while greatly expanding on other parts of the world and minorities. Thus, I would assess this article's completeness as poorly developed.