User:Siluna/Group 10 element/Xiaoxu Qing Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Siluna


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Siluna/Group_10_element?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article
 * Group 10 element

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

There seems to be no edits on the lead section. The lead section of the orignal article seems to be precise enough. However, maybe consider concluding some of the upcoming ideas in the following sections, like the properties and the applicaions of the groups 10 elements. Also the history of the discoveries could be added in the lead section, too.

Content:

The first subtopic may be renamed as "Properties" to include chemical and physical properties. Maybe consider add some more in chemical and physical propterties, though I think it's precies and conclusive enough now. Also there lack some references. I saw that both the chemical and physical properties are from the same source, so may be nice to find some more. Applicaion part definetly need some more explanations, maybe consider expand each idea that's already there. The "biological role and toxicity" part seems to be a bit lonley in the end. Maybe consider incorporate them into the "Properties" part or explain more.

Tone and Balance:

The added contents are neutral. There are no biases seen in the paragraph. Many ideas seems to be a bit underrepresented. Keep on going with the neutral tone!

Sources and References

The properties part needs the most addional references. They are now only based on one sources. Many sentences seems to be from different sources so may consider improve this part. It seems that some of the reference are too old. They would be better replaced with some up-to-date sources. It appears like many of the sources are secondary. It'll be nice if add some more primary sources, instead of reviews and books(not saying they are bad, your selections are fair enough).

Images and Media

There are no images or media added. Maybe consider adding some in the history part and properties part. History part now seems to be a bit hard to read with loads of description. Maybe better if they are devided into paragraphs with images of people who found it or something.

There are three major issues that could be fixed. The structure of the article is a bit disordered, lack of references and lack of elaboration of the applications. The overall article is well written and nice to read. Good work!