User:Simay Memisoglu/International sport/Caramc456 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Simay Memisoglu


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Simay%20Memisoglu/International_sport?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * International sport

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The article attains a well-developed lead section and a precise lead introductory sentence, however the lead does not include a description of the article’s major sections which is vital for a reader who wants a quick synopsis. I suggest summarizing the topics of "History" and "Economics" into a few sentences and adding them to the lead section. In addition, the lead section contains a sentence that is identical to a sentence in the "History" section. The sentence is, "The cricket match played between the United States and Canada is the first ever International match played in any sport." I recommend paraphrasing this sentence in the history section and researching more material about this match to include in the article. The content you plan on adding to the article is relevant, up to date, and neutral! Regarding the content of the article, I suggest researching information about the history of the FIFA World Cup as well as the Paralympic games because they were described in the lead section to be other examples of international sports. If you utilize the IUP libraries database, I found that the Credo Reference has articles about the Olympic Games and the economics of international sports that may be helpful in finding new material to incorporate in the article. Using this database will allow you to expand and compare the information from the article to the website because it is a reliable source. The paragraph you want to include concerning the economics of international sports is very vital and well written! Lastly, I propose including information about how many international sports there are and the types of international Games there are. The links provided in the bibliography do work, however the content is not backed up by secondary sources. I would therefore recommend utilizing the IUP libraries database to find secondary sources to include. Overall, you did a great job in writing essential additions to the article.