User:Simone.eloise/Worker bee/Ms1904 Peer Review

General info
Me: Ms1904
 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Editing: Simone.eloise


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Simone.eloise/Worker bee
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Worker bee

Evaluate the drafted changes
Great start to your draft, your topic is very interesting! One thing I saw that I think you should look at is small grammar issue. Throughout your paragraphs I saw a few grammatical issues, should be an easy fix just by proof reading. Maybe include a few more citations in your paragraphs, especially the first one, and I think one of your citations needs to be looked at because some of the information might be getting flagged.As far as your Bibliography goes i think you did a wonderful job at keeping track of your sources. Further on in your Draft I would recommend adding headings above the sections you are editing in your sand box so that you can keep a track of what you are working on. Otherwise you are doing great and its a very interesting article! Good Job!! ~ Ms1904 (talk) 03:38, 12 March 2024 (UTC)