User:SisiShen/Lin Huiyin/Siyi Shen Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? SisiShen
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:SisiShen/Lin Huiyin

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? Yes, the content added includes Lin Huiyin's role in literature, which is briefly described in the updated lead,
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? Yes, the Lead address who Lin Huiyin is.
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? The Lead includes description but not brief. It is more like a brief biography.
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? No
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? The Lead is overly detailed because I think there is a large part of her biography. Also, the experience of study abroad should not appear in the Lead.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? Yes.
 * Is the content added up-to-date? Yes.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? Yes, just mentioning Maya Lin is no meaning. So, it is better to add the connection between Lin Huiyin and Maya Lin. For example, whether Maya Lin's art style is influenced by Lin Huiyin.
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics? No.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral? Yes, it is neutral.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? No.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? No, the number support sentences is reasonable.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? No.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? Yes.
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? According to the title, yes.
 * Are the sources current? Yes
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible? Only one source is written by a diverse spectrum of authors. No issue about historically marginalized individuals.
 * Check a few links. Do they work? There is only 2 links provided, which works.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? The content is clear and easy to read.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? One is "ideal". Please pay attention to the capital letter for the family name, "Liang Sicheng".
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? Yes, though there is no subtitle to point out the main topic of the two paragraphs. One is a biography, one is her literature.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic? NA
 * Are images well-captioned? NA
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations? NA
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way? NA

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? Yes, but the first part is repetitive with the article.
 * What are the strengths of the content added? The second part is clear. It is with topic sentence and with support materials.
 * How can the content added be improved? The second paragraph states Lin Huiyin's achievement in literature. The direct way for readers to learn about her writing style is to give examples of her poem. As a female writer, I think it is useful to list the works Lin Huiyin wrote. Besides, it should be more careful not to write the same content which is already in the article, if the new content is not a Lead.