User:Sjmiatech/Twenty-second Amendment to the United States Constitution/ProfNMat Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sjmiatech


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Sjmiatech/Twenty-second_Amendment_to_the_United_States_Constitution?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Twenty-second Amendment to the United States Constitution

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: looks fine and probably does not need to be updated

Content: I think the beginning of your article body is a bit confusing because there are multiple proposals being discussed. I would like to have it organized maybe with subheadings like "1940 Proposal" and then discuss the 1940 hearings, and then "1947 Proposal" to discuss the version that actually passed. I think these sections could be a little more succinct as I see information repeated.

Tone/balance: Be sure that you are clearly stating who is expressing the view that the lack of term limits could lead to tyranny, rather than stating it as established fact.

Sources and references: Be careful that you include the citation right after the information. You may need to cite the same source multiple times in order to achieve this. For example, in first paragraph, there is information about both the 1940 and 1947 hearings, but only the 1940 committee hearing is cited.

Organization: See my above comment about the hearings. The sandbox draft doesn't indicate which section each paragraph will go in. Some new sections may need to be created. e.g. "Criticisms" could be a new section, or you could retitle "Attempts at Repeal" to "Criticisms." Do a good proofread before publishing.