User:Skallasj4863/Maternal death/Cadence.m3 Peer Review

Lead

Lead has been updated, looks like new statistics have been added and it is now formatted in a way that flows more smoothly. The first sentence is direct and concise, directly explaining what the article is about. While the lead in is detailed I feel like it would be helpful if there was labels above each paragraph telling what it is going to be about, I'm not exactly sure where the lead in ends and where the next section starts. Additionally, I think it would be helpful to add in a brief sentence explaining the rest of the sections in the lead.

Content

Content is up to date. Irrelevant content has been removed and replaced with more current statistics. I'm not sure if the chart is new from this group but it is a nice representation of maternal mortality in the world. I also like how more specific stats have been added and there is a denominator included so we can see the extent of the stat. The ethic paragraph is a nice addition to this article. It's interesting to see the correlation between women in Africa in that country verses women from Africa in France. I also love the added section on Covid I think that is very interesting to see the correlation between the virus and maternal mortality rates. I would suggest instead of developing countries, putting low income countries, it's just something I've heard to be a better term and it might be more well received when publishing the article online.

Tone and Balence

Tone is very neutral and factual. No claims seem to be heavily biased. There is a good mix of represented groups, the additional information on Sub-Saharan Africa is a nice additive.

Sources

Each statistic has a source at the end of it which is good. Upon further inspection of the sources they seem to be all from reliable websites. The WHO, UNICEF, CDC, UN and other credible articles are all referenced. Journals all have credible background as well.

Organization and Images

The organization is well thought out with each subject flowing into the next. However, I do think it would benifit from headings above each section. It might also be useful to add a couple more pictures to keep the article interactive. This is a link that has a website that I believe would be a good addition to the article. https://www.cdc.gov/nchs/data/hestat/maternal-mortality/2021/maternal-mortality-rates-2021.htm

Overall

Overall the article seems to be enhanced throughly! I really like the added stats and the sections you chose to add. With a couple tweaks I think it could look really nice. Great job!

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