User:Skch96/Misconceptions about HIV/AIDS/Ogag3r Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

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Skch96


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Misconceptions about HIV/AIDS
 * Misconceptions about HIV/AIDS

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Everything in the article was relevant to the topic.

There were some excessive citations that will need to be fixed. Some of the headings for topics are really long so maybe try and shorten those up.

One thing that stuck out to me was in the opener the phrase "simple ignorance" is used. I feel like this is a little accusatory so maybe just change it to ignorance.

Some of the misconceptions that are talked about could use some more detail and history of their origin.

There are a few citations that go to a source not found page so you may want to update those. A lot of the sources are from the 90s so it may be worth looking into seeing if there are any updated sources.

There are several points in the article in which a citation is needed or there are excessive citations.

There was nothing that I could see on the sandbox so these are based on the original article.