User:Sketchy Bee/Akwete cloth/BellabsDreamLab Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sketchy Bee, AbigailLynnArts


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Sketchy%20Bee/Akwete_cloth?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Akwete cloth

Evaluate the drafted changes
- One thing that could be done is to add links to other wikipedia articles in this draft. For example, if you highlight the phrase "Abia State" and click the link button on the top of the page you should be able to insert a link to the matching wiki article on Asia State.

- The "introduction" and "motifs" sections on the article need citations added, though I imagine that is already a wip.

- Potentially get rid of the "literally" in the second sentence to sound more professional/more like a wiki article.

- Maybe move the second half of the introduction section (sentence 6 and downward) and incorporating with the history section down below. It may be more fitting there.

-The history section says that the cloth was invented around the 17th to 18th century but also later says that Dada invented the cloth around the 14th to 16th century. Maybe I'm missing something, but more clarification might be needed here.

-I would maybe say "two yards" instead of "2yd" in the third paragraph of the history section.

-It says in the second paragraph of the "motifs" section that those who wore the Ikaki pattern who weren't royalty would be sold into slavery. It might be good to explain why that was if you happen to have that info.

-You guys have added a lot of new info to the original article which is very impressive! Keep up the good work. :)