User:Sketchy Bee/Akwete cloth/ScoutB12 Peer Review

Lead:

The opening introductory sentence should concisely cover your page topic. I understand the need to explain and provide context for the Akwete people but I think the intro would be more effective if the opening sentence led by discussing the Akwete cloth.

Sources and references:

The hyperlinks are helpful but I would recommend adding more references

Organization:

There are areas where you could be more concise; especially in the intro. I felt like the intro went into the history of the Akwete cloth which isn't necessary considering that it is followed by a history section.

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