User:Skghal/Leonardo Bianchi/Sma2023 Peer Review

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Hello,

You have updated the article nicely. I have provided my thoughts below.

Lead

The lead is concise and gives an overview of what Leonardo Bianchi is known for. You might want to include more volume in the introduction and include that he is remembered for his studies and experiments of the frontal lobe.

Content

Overall the article needs more content and volume. Are there any other work or papers he has published? Is there any information on his personal life?

Early life and education- Change the third sentence to be past tense. The last sentence should be merged with the sentence before: He completed his secondary and high school education in Benevento and graduated in Medicine and Surgery at the University of Naples in January 1871 where he was taught by great influences, such as Luciano Armanni and Otto Von Schron.

Is there any more information on his time as a professor, Minister of Public Education, and/or part of the Italian Senate?

Work and contributions- More detail is needed on his experiments. How did he make the conclusions from his ablations? What data did he collect (if any) on how he concluded there was “loss of attention, object recognition, memory, associative skills, and social skills”. Are his conclusions about the frontal lobe accepted now or are his conclusions outdated?

I would link the frontal lobe and frontal lobe syndrome Wikipedia articles.

Tone and Balance: The content added is neutral and shows no signs of bias.

Sources and References: All sources are reliable primary and secondary sources of information. There is one archived article with a working link and two books (authored by Leonardo Bianchi). The information from the archived article is accurately portrayed and was published in 2012. I believe more information can potentially be extracted from the two books that were written by Leonardo Bianchi and can add more volume to the article.

Organization: The content added is well written and organized. I have provided suggestions above for a few grammatical errors.

Images and Media: You can potentially add a picture of a brain with the frontal lobe labeled. The image currently in the article is from before 1926 from the public domain from the National Library of Medicine and adhere to Wikipedia’s copyright regulation.

Overall impressions: I believe the article gives a good overview on Leonardo Bianchi's most famous works but is missing some details that can potentially give a better picture on how he came up with his conclusions. I believe a lot of these details can be found in his book, "The functions of the frontal lobe." Let me know if you need any clarifications, thanks!