User:Skinnyeleven/Zapatista Army of National Liberation/Expat13 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Skinnyeleven


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Skinnyeleven/Zapatista_Army_of_National_Liberation?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Zapatista Army of National Liberation

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi, great work! I'm curious as to how you might incorporate your added information into the lead. Since you're primarily working on the "religious" section, this could amount to merely a sentence. But definitely consider incorporating at least a sentence or two that summarizes what you will be adding in the main body to the lead section. You have certainly added relevant and important information to the existing article. Your sources are quite recent and they are reliable. I didn't see any missing content or misplaced information. The content is certainly well organized and logically presented. The sentence structure is professional and easy to read. There were a few typos, for example, in your first quote in the "religion" section, you begin with an upper-case "H." Your third paragraph has a sentence that reads "led to brought many", which doesn't make sense. I was also curious about your constant switching between lower- and upper-case "c" for "Christianity."

You included a question about this sentence: "The organization of these catechists and events such as the 1974 Indigenous Congress laid much of the ideological and often organizational groundwork for the EZLN to unite many indigenous communities under a banner of liberation." You wondered if this should go into the "background" section. Possibly. However, it is relevant and consistent information for this subsection. If you want to mention it in the background, you could abbreviate or summarize it for the religious subsection.

Overall, I think you've made a great addition to this existing article. My main advice would be going over it for typos and grammatical errors. Well done. :)