User:Skirby0923/A Cross Line/Wesleyatwork Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Skirby0923


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Skirby0923/A_Cross_Line?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Skirby0923/A_Cross_Line?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template

Evaluate the drafted changes
For the lead, I think it would be helpful to specify that George Edgerton is a pen-name. For the lead, you could include some information bringing up that there is a sense of scandal or that an affair is taking place. The lead is looking good so far. I think you should change plot overview to 'Plot Summary' just for simplicity. Include some scene details if they seem important, but definitely summarize any major conversational points that stand out and include most of the character interactions that move the story forward. The literary criticism point gives a sense of a timeline-- was the criticism shortly after the initial positive reactions, or was this later on? If you do not have any dates for this, no worries, I was just wondering. Create a 'references' heading for structural consistency. Obviously, the heavily detailed plot needs to be summarized in a succinct. This story in particular has a lot of flowery language and long passages. Just make sure you find the places that really stand out and go from there. Otherwise, the tone is neutral, you have a good reference, and you are on a strong start. The page just needs fleshed out. Great job, Shelby. Take a look at some different short story Wikipedia articles if you're feeling stuck or want an idea of how much content you think is fitting for the length of this short story.

Finish strong,

Wesley Nye.