User:Skoobie03/Nyaung-gan, Myanmar/SamTyler526 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Skoobie03 and Nasimfredj


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Skoobie03/Nyaung-gan%2C_Myanmar?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * NA

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think your plan for the lead/opening statement is great, It also couldn't hurt to describe the site a little more, maybe put the description of where the site is located instead of in it's own section.

In the site/details part I would talk about the location in greater detail, describe the environment of the cite a little bit. There appears to a grammar issue with your 2nd sentence in the grave goods section. I still understood what you were saying, but would still be good to clean up. Other then that the section looks good, and the outline that you've done looks promising.

As for the references, they both look good except for end of the first one, I think you accidentally copied part of the site you made the citation in, I could be wrong though.

Overall, I could get much of a tone from small amount of writing, but it seems a bit causal. I'm sure the causal tone is just because you are making notes to yourself before adding more info into the Site, but it's still something to be aware of.