User:Skylily19/Literacy & Colonialism/Paslaskip1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Skylily19


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Skylily19/Literacy_%26_Colonialism?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


 * 1) First, what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way?
 * 2) I really like the lead statement. It is a great introduction to the article, but also understands how literacy is defined in different cultures. I think that is important when determining literacy in different cultures and regions. I thought your statement that literacy is overlooked in indigenous cultures, that was powerful and educated me a lot. I enjoyed reading this article because it helped me learn things I had never thought about before!
 * 3) What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement?
 * 4) I think the author does a great job on this article! I would suggest changing the cited quotes to help them flow more smoothly in the article. They are kind of dropped in, but adding them to be apart of a sentence would help make that connection stronger!
 * 5) What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article?
 * 6) My only suggestion would be to add a little bit more about the definition of literacy of Indigenous cultures and dwell on that more. I am very interested to learn more about that topic!
 * 7) Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know!
 * 8) It is very well thought out and structured, and the citations are from a credible source. I could use more reliable sources like this!