User:Sl6268/Pesticide incidents in the San Joaquin Valley/Ethanwon14 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User: Sl6268


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Sl6268/Pesticide incidents in the San Joaquin Valley


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead


 * 1) The lead on the article does not seem to be noticeable or transparent in the article. By making the lead more visible for the readers, it will allow the content to flow smoothly. Additionally, it does not necessarily add updated content in regards to your topic of the research paper
 * 2) With no clear lead, it lacks an introductory sentence and therefore should be implemented
 * 3) The no lead makes it difficult for readers to gain a certain understanding before diving into the article. A brief introduction gains their attention
 * 4) Lead needs some information
 * 5) The overall Lead needs more work and information that entails the importance of the articles

Content


 * 1) All of the content is relevant to the topic and you’ve done a great job making all the information relatable to the topic and utilizing it to inform the audience
 * 2) The content is somewhat up-to-date with your chosen articles being somewhat early. However, make sure that your articles are precisely dated and check the dates for all of them
 * 3) All the content on the article should belong there which is good, but I did not see any irrelevant information
 * 4) The article does not particularly focus on the equity gaps but rather the disadvantages of the exposure and use of pesticides in the Central Valley

Tone and Balance


 * 1) All the added content is neutral and remains unbiased
 * 2) No claims seem to heavily biased. Done a great so far of just presenting the facts
 * 3) All viewpoints are properly represented and accounted for which is important for the articles
 * 4) No any sort of persuasion that readers mayfeel. Remains objective throughout the way

Sources and References


 * 1) Most content is backed up for most part. Some parts are lacking reliable sources
 * 2) Does accurately reflect all of the cited sources and does not simply plagiarize from the articles
 * 3) The sources are thorough and provide plentiful of information, displaying its mass of knowledge and information
 * 4) The sources are not all current but relatively recent in a sense
 * 5) Some of the sources are written by a variety of authors for the sources, which is normal. Allows for different perspectives
 * 6) The articles seem to be all peer-reviewed which makes all the sources credible
 * 7) The links do work

Organization


 * 1) The organization of the article is well organized and concise. The contents page makes it easy to follow the flow of information
 * 2) Only contains some spelling and grammar errors. For the most part, the article is well-written
 * 3) The article is broken down into sections and contains good sub-topics

Images and Media


 * 1) No images or media
 * 2) No captions
 * 3) No images
 * 4) Make sure to add images following the guidelines. It would help enhance the article visuals

For New Articles Only


 * 1) Does follow requirements
 * 2) Contains the necessary amount of list of sources that was used in the article
 * 3) Good pattern and consistency
 * 4) Yes

Overall Impressions


 * 1) The overall quality of the information is the article is well explained and articulated as it touches on the topic of pesticides in the Central Valley. The information does great in connecting the information and allowing the readers to follow along with the history and incidents of the pesticides
 * 2) The strength of the content comes for the citing of the sources. The article is well cited with certain works and phrases hyperlinked so that readers are able to backtrack the credibility of the information as well as learn more about something they caught while reading
 * 3) The content can be improved by simply making a broad introduction that explains the whole purpose of the article. Additionally, images and media makes the page more appealing for readers