User:Sl6268/Pesticide incidents in the San Joaquin Valley/Ylim4 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sl6268, Cleefin


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Sl6268/Pesticide_incidents_in_the_San_Joaquin_Valley?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Pesticide incidents in the San Joaquin Valley - Wikipedia

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * The lead is relevant to the topic of the article. I like how they added the voices of the civilians and political response. The information is not too jampacked and complicated.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * The content is up to date and relevant to the topic
 * I feel the information fits well into the original article. Although I feel that the medical journal research could better fit under another topic instead of response to pesticide usage.
 * The political response does not have much information in it however this will be later added onto.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * The content is neutral and I sense no bias in the text. It is straight to the point.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Plenty of sources used and likes are easy to open. Sources include other already published Wikipedia pages and articles from unbiased news sources. Public health reports are also used.

Organization
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 * Overall it is easy to follow and I like the addition of highlighting and boldening certain terms to help them stand out, especially for chemicals.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:

- I suggest finding a better place for medical journal research but the addition is headed towards the right direction.