User:Sleepwhenyouredead/Strange Beasts of China/ConnorPrim Peer Review

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Sleepwhenyouredead, AnnaliseD0d, JoshuaW25


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Lead
Link to Jeremy Tiang’s Wikipedia page through his name?

Link to New York Times like you did the Washington Post

Great job keeping it concise and objective!

Summary
“Her cousin’s daughter”-> Could be said in a simpler way, i.e: “her cousin and her daughter Lucia” or “her cousin and niece Lucia”

The word “her” is redundant in each item of the list because every item begins with the same possessive pronoun.

Great ending though; I love the last sentence!

Themes
Does the word “outstanding” really portray the meaning you are trying to get across here? Since I am reading it from a completely unknowledgeable point of view in regards to your book, I don’t quite understand what you mean by this sentence.

Beasts
Is there a reason the section on sorrowful beasts is so much longer than the other sections?

Capitalization of the names for the beasts is confusing me a bit. Does the first word get capitalized or not? Consistency here would go a long way towards enhancing the professionalism of the article.

In the flourishing beasts section, change the word “hat” to “that.”

Translation
Second paragraph could use a citation, especially since it contains material that could be seen as an opinion.

Authorship Style and Inspiration
Are you sure this should come at the end of your article? I think it might be better served earlier on, but that’s just my personal preference.

Overall
Great job guys! I think you did a wonderful job getting the tone Wikipedia requires, and I was really impressed with the quality of your work!