User:Sleepythedwarf/Sienna Gonzales/Tcspencer01 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sleepythedwarf


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Sleepythedwarf/Sienna_Gonzales?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
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Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead-in is very well-written. One suggestion I have is for the first sentence, "Sienna Gonzales describes herself as a queer, multi-racial artist who uses bright colors and an abstract form of illustration in her works." It is unclear here whether Gonzalez describes herself using bright colors and an abstract for of illustration or if the description of herself is limited to her being a queer, multi-racial artist. It is probably ok to simply say "Sienna Gonzalez is," or this could be broken into different sentences (unless I'm wrong and she did personally describe her colors that way, in which case don't change anything!).

Also, it might be beneficial to add the sentence, "She has been honing her craft since she was one year old, when she would mark her grandmother’s driveway with creative chalk drawings" to a separate section titled Early Life. It seems a bit specific for the lead-in and doesn't lead into any sections that follow. It could be replaced with a sentence saying she is an alumni of UCLA, and much of her art has been exhibited around UCLA and the surrounding areas, something that is described in more detail in later sections.

All of the content added is relevant to the topic and up-to-date! It also deals with Wikipedia's equity gaps by covering the life and accomplishments a queer person of color. All content is neutral, and no viewpoints are over or underrepresented. The sources are also appropriate. If you can, I do suggest adding footnotes linked to a bibliography section rather than the links currently used because that format is typically saved for links to other Wikipedia articles. To that, you just do to the end of the sentence and click "Cite" on the toolbar, and then it lets you paste in the link and automatically cites it.

The content is well-written, there are no grammatical or spelling errors, it is well-organized, and no images are used (perfectly fine!). Overall, great job!