User:Sltannaeemi/Deforestation in Central America/Kawther.H Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sltan Naeemi


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Sltannaeemi/Deforestation in Central America


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Deforestation in Central America

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hey Sltan,

this a great topic that you chose to work on and I like how you focus on one area where deforestation is happening instead of speaking about deforestation in general.

Speaking about the association between deforestation and other social issues in the region is a very good approach. This since it sheds light on the impacts of deforestation that are less thought of, and it presents a minority point of view. Also, the History section of your draft seems to be the strongest of the three sections that you have edited so far. There are a few things however that will make the draft stronger as a whole.

Sources and Referencing:

- The first three sentences of the History section do not have a citation attached.

- References number 1,2,5, and 6 are very good.

- Reference number 3 needs to be supported with another source. This since the initial report that this information is taken from is nowhere to be found and upon looking up confirmation on the decrease in size of the largest forests in Central America that occurred in the past 15 years I was not able to confirm it was 23%. (disclaimer: I only did a basic search on this).

- Reference number 4 is a news article. Although a good place to start, news articles can be very biased and they sometimes present facts in a twisted way that is made to serve one's own views. Therefore, it is not considered a reliable source and a different source must be used to confirm the information.

Presentation of Information:

The Efforts to reverse the effects section seems to be presented in a heavily opinioned manner. There are some great ideas presented in this section. However, as you know, as part of the Wikipedia rules any article that is on this platform must be presented in a fully objective way without adding one's own ideas or weighing in. Therefore, working on this section and presenting it in a tone/ way that is more factual will be ideal. Also, more references are needed in this section.

Content:

The Global Impact section of the draft is only supported by reference number 4, therefore, adding other references from peer-reviewed articles will be needed. I found a few on the Carleton Library Omni Search.

Suggestions:

Dedicating a section for some of the scientific aspects of deforestation in terms of the environment and further explaining the CO2 issue will, in my opinion, add so much value to the article since it will have both the social aspects and the scientific aspect of the issue.

Overall:

Good work and good luck.

K.H