User:Sltiger/Nike, Inc./Bgirlhero Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sltiger


 * Link to draft you're reviewing https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Sltiger/Nike%2C_Inc.?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Nike, Inc.
 * Evaluate the drafted changes
 * Evaluate the drafted changes

Lead


 * Lack of introductory sentence

Content


 * Not specific
 * For example, what is the specific name of the bioplastic Nike is using in their shoes?
 * No content on how Nike is affecting climate change; only content on how they are being affected by climate change (i.e. having to change their operations)
 * Include content on how much waste or emissions Nike currently creates/emits, etc.
 * Would like to see more content on climate change policies that are affecting Nike

Tone and Balance


 * Sounds biased/like the article is trying to convince me that Nike is sustainable
 * Try phrasing sentencing like "According to Nike's Sustainability Portion of their website"
 * Unsure what sources are being used but it feels like it is coming from a Nike representative
 * Try using more reputable sources if this is the case

Sources and References


 * No sources

Organization


 * Feels like the article has no logical flow/like all the research is just thrown together