User:Smallearner/Internet celebrity/Lala327 Peer Review

General info
smalllearner
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Smallearner/Internet_celebrity?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Internet celebrity
 * Internet celebrity

Evaluate the drafted changes
While looking over your sandbox, I liked your ideas to add TikTok and Instagram as another type of internet celebrity. Other than the one source you noted, have you found any additional resources? The original article encompasses a lot of great material covering the topic of internet celebrity. You also have additional ideas that will enhance the article.

You noted an interesting part of internet celebrity regarding children and consent in the type of influence section you created in your sandbox. I think there is the potential for an entire new article regarding that topic. Potentially, many of the subtopics on internet celebrity could and likely will become their own articles. There is a subtopic entitled effects on fans, but I also think the children and consent could be its own subtopic in the article regarding. Perhaps something like: implication of internet celebrity.

Overall, the article does a good job at providing the reader with information regarding an ever-growing topic: internet celebrity. I think the organization of the article could flow a bit better. Towards the end of the article, there are a lot of topics that pertain to internet celebrity that could be organized in a better way. One other change that would be helpful would be a better final paragraph of the article. The end of the article is awkward with it just ending on the topic of effect on fans.