User:Smalls2023/Developmental psychology/Dauryn Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

smalls2023


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 * Editing User:Smalls2023/Developmental psychology - Wikipedia


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 * Developmental psychology - Wikipedia

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I really like how it relates to the previous paragraph about research. I think the sentences have a lot of potential if it could be reworded to be more cohesive. The wording is a bit confusing and can throw the reader off. For example, i understand that your sentence is piggybacking from what Developmental psychology research is doing but I wouldn't have know that without going through your references. i was very confused at reading your sentence and it could be better if you add more context to it. Such as, "research in developmental psychology has some limitations but at the moment researchers are working to understand how transitioning through stages of life and biological factors may impact our behaviors and development". That sentence can provide more context to the reader without them having to look further in other readings to understand.