User:Smalls2023/Developmental psychology/Haleymck Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Smalls2023


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Smalls2023/Developmental_psychology?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Developmental psychology

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Smalls2023! I really enjoy developmental psychology so I'm glad you chose this article! While I was reading your article, I looked at your reference and noticed that it was from 1996. While I agree and support what you have written, I would suggest finding a more recent article to back your claims. After reading the article and what your proposed changes are, I am confused by what you mean by 'research was made'. I would suggest changing this to 'researchers have found' or 'research has been done'. I would also expand on the specific models needed by looking up additional articles that describe these models and include that information. Overall, great work!