User:Smalls2023/Developmental psychology/Hayelizabeth24 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Smalls2023


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Smalls2023/Developmental_psychology?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall I feel so far it is starting off pretty good. The first sentence introduces the topic and what it is about. Does talk about a few major things which are still describing the main topic and talking about what it is about. There are some things that I was unsure of or that could be worded differently. One was the sentence that starts off "Research is made", you could take the is made part and leave the rest of the sentence. But overall it is looking good in my opinion.