User:Smcc24/Dietary management of Parkinson's disease/Alea m12 Peer Review

General info
Smcc24
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Smcc24/Dietary management of Parkinson's disease
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Dietary management of Parkinson's disease

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: The lead is good, I can see where changes were made and what they were.

Content: The content is good, however the new section may come across as a little biased with saying that the emerging diets are "promising". ( looks like it was changed to potential now).

Tone/Balance: the tone was good, the article has a lot of good information and doesn't seem biased. I like that it goes over several different dietary options and the benefits without really being biased towards one or another

Sources/References: The sources came from a good secondary source. May be beneficial to find another source from a different site as well but information is good.

Organization: The article is well written, the last paragraph I feel could be a little reworded because it mentions that dairy can worsen symptoms but some nutrients in dairy products are needed. Maybe finding a way that people with Parkinson's can get these nutrients without consuming dairy may be beneficial if possible.

Overall Impression:The edits made are good, I like where unnecessary information was crossed out, and that some of the information previously in there was recognized as primary or unnecessary and removed. The only changes I think are necessary are maybe changing the part about dairy and potentially finding information on how to get those nutrients elsewhere.