User:Smd575/United States declaration of war on Japan/Ivyxalyse Peer Review

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Smd575
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Smd575/United States declaration of war on Japan
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * United States declaration of war on Japan:

Evaluate the drafted changes
"It was originally stipulated that the attack should not commence until thirty minutes after Japan had informed the U.S. that it was withdrawing from further peace negotiations, but the attack began before the notice could be delivered."


 * I would clean up this wording a bit, "stipulated" and "should" don't flow together well for me. The whole sentence could use a tweak. Maybe something as simple as would instead of should.


 * I feel like this section could also benefit from sources from a Japanese perspective since it is specifically referencing Japan's declaration of war on the US.... maybe a document declaring war. I will look for specifics.