User:Smf183/Stramilano (1929 film)/JJ Irelandd Peer Review

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Smf183/Stramilano (1929 film)
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Evaluate the drafted changes
Make sure to copy edit when finalizing the draft, as there are many technical (punctuational and missing words) errors in the lead section. Cleaning up use of excessive articles (the, a, etc.) would also make the reading flow more succinctly.

The last line of the Biography section is very convoluted and runs on. It is difficult to determine the meaning of the sentence.

Stramilano should be italicised throughout.

I believe "References" should be its own heading.

Structurally, the information is divided up nicely between the sections, enabling ease of navigation. Well done.

Make sure to link to existing Wikipedia articles; there must be some about Corrado D'Ericco, for example. This will additionally add context to the implications of fascism within the film.