User:Smg02/Healthcare in the United States/Macybartlett Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Smg02


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Smg02/Healthcare_in_the_United_States?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Healthcare in the United States

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * Yes!
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?
 * The lead in the original article is too long, and I think you shortened it well.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Yes, all relevant
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?
 * Your addition of the 2009 study at Harvard Medical School fills an equity gap by giving more representation to uninsured, working people which was not previously included.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * Well written and neutral.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Good, current sources
 * Check a few links. Do they work?
 * Yes

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Your addition to the demographic differences section is a little convoluted but the content is important. Maybe restructure it a little to make it more concise/straightforward?

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * Yes, especially the portion on accessibility of insurance.