User:Smguzman/Diffuse infantile fibromatosis/Mhassan1738 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Smguzman, Helendhuynh, Matthew.Lee4, and Alukyo1


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Diffuse infantile fibromatosis
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Diffuse infantile fibromatosis

Evaluate the drafted changes
Question 1. Do the group’s edits substantially improve the article as described in the Wikipedia peer review “Guiding framework”?

Yes, the material written in the article is done so using neutral language and utilizes sources that are current (especially all are within the last decade) and come from reliable, published sources. While the article tends to avoid medical jargon, an editing suggestion I would make would be to simplify the language further, especially in the introduction, where even someone with medical knowledge like myself would have a hard time following along with the contents of the article. Likewise, they do use words such as "patients" which should be change to non-medical denominations such as "people."

Question 2. Has the group achieved its overall goals for improvement?

Yes, they met each of their 12 goals that they set out to achieve. Each goals was essentially to add information and to improve on the corresponding sections and they expanded on each one with additional information.

Question 3. Are the edits formatted consistent with Wikipedia’s manual of style?

Yes, the article follows the proper syntax (or "manual of style") in that citations are made after the ending of sentences, proper tense is used, and language is kept neutral for the most part. That being said, they do use the word "patients" multiple times and it is worth noting that this should be changed to less-medically focused language such as "people." ~