User:Smguzman/Diffuse infantile fibromatosis/SMiry Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Smguzman, Helendhuynh, Matthew.Lee4, and Alukyo1


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Diffuse_infantile_fibromatosis?action=edit


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Diffuse infantile fibromatosis

Evaluate the drafted changes
Question 1: Do the group’s edits substantially improve the article as described in the Wikipedia peer review “Guiding framework”?

Yes, the group's edits definitely improved the quality of the article from what they started out with initially. There are clear sections that very similarly follow the Wikipedia's guiding framework. Of note, I do think there could be improvement with the introductory sentence of the article so that it clearly describes the article's topic in a little bit more detail. Perhaps somehow combining the first and second sentences into one detailed and complex first sentence would improve the quality of the introductory sentence. Other than that, the content that was added to the article was very relevant to the topic that was assigned.

Question 2: Has the group achieved its overall goals for improvement?

After taking a look at the group's proposed edits, it seems like they have met all their goals! Each proposed edit has clearly been outlined and there is a substantial amount of data written in each section.

Question 3D: Do the edits reflect language that supports diversity, equity, and inclusion?

Yes, the edits reflect diversity, equity and inclusion in any places that is relevant. This group used word's like "individuals" which is inclusive of everybody rather than using exclusive terms.