User:Smi02002/Pattrice jones/Rachelscarseth Peer Review

Peer review:

Lead-

The lead is the same as the existing page's for the jones page. The lead is accurately giving an introduction to the topic and includes main identities of jones that are important. It does not present information that is not present in the article. It is concise.

Content-

The content is relevant and up to date. There does not seem to be content that doesn't relate to the subject, bu more information could be helpful. In particular, I think it would be nice to explain that jones doesn't want her name to be capitalized. In general, more information would be better.

Tone and balance-

The content seems neutral and unbiased. The discussion about veganism doesn't seem to be leaning towards or against in terms of the author's beliefs.

Sources-

There are only four sources, so if possible more would be best. The sources are mainly about the beliefs jones has, so if there are more sources about jones herself that can be used, that would be a good idea. I am having trouble opening links, but that may just be my computer's issue/on my end.

Organization-

The writing is clear and easy to read. It is for the most part grammatically correct and well organized.

Images and media-

There are no images in the article, so adding those should be a goal.

Overall impressions-

I think the article had good information, but if possible there should be more content and photos. I think the writing was well done and it is organized in a way that is not difficult to understand.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Article on pattrice jones by user Smi02002.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Smi02002/Pattrice_jones?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Pattrice jones

Evaluate the drafted changes
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