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Wiki First draft - The black feminism article lacks a section on black women and education

The first american college was established in 1636 but African Americans were not allowed access until much later. Although the Ohio based institution Oberlin College allowed black and white students entry in 1835, there are no records of an African american women graduating from an American higher education institution until 1850. Lucy Ann Stanton is noted as the first African American woman to graduate from an American college in 1850. This was a great achievement for African American women but their fight for equality in the area of receiving higher education had not yet been won. The first draft I am reviewing is Second-wave feminism.


 * 1) Does the draft draw conclusions or try to convince the reader to accept one particular point of view? The draft draws a conclusion that the women campaigning for social change was only important or more important due to the bad actions of the Chilean general Augusto Pinochet.
 * 2) I do not believe there are any words or phrases that do not feel nuetral.
 * 3) Does the draft make claims on behalf of unnamed groups or people? The draft makes claims on behalf of many unnamed women from different backgrounds participating in second-wave feminism. One claim that was made was how some women primarily participated because their husbands and children were disappearing.
 * 4) I do not believe the draft focused too much on negative or positive information.
 * 5) The "Second-wave feminism in Chile started in 1973. Activism for women became more prominent from previous years because of the dictatorship of General Pinochet. " statement dos not include a source just a link.

Wiki Second draft-

African American Women were finally allowed to receive higher education but they still faced many obstacles when it came to academia. As the years went by African American women were walking away with P.H.D's but many say that it was hard to get teaching positions in white institutions and Black feminist academics argue that they still struggle to get the recognition and respect they deserve. Besides racism and sexism playing apart in the reason the black feminist academics struggled to get the respect and recognition they deserved it could also be due to the fact that there were not that many black women leaders in college.

Not many black women leaders were in colleges because for sometime African American women were not allowed to attend predominately white colleges as students nor as administrators or professors and because most historically black colleges were far or non existent it was hard for black women to attend college at all. Brown versus Board of Education opened the doors of predominantly White institutions to African American students. Getting through the door of these institutions was one thing but getting the other students to accept them and the professors to treat and teach them equally was another. It is said that “Black women in higher education are isolated, underutilized, and often demoralized." But even with all the cards stacked against them African American woman have not stop striving for higher education."African American females have consistently represented the largest non-White college enrolled student body (approximately 64%) in higher education and currently account for over 67% of earned degrees of the African American student population."